Community Health Assessment Report for City of Horizon

This report provides a community assessment of the city of Horizons and identifies potential health issues for the Horizon community. The report also provides an insight into the roles of the registered nurse in advocating, mediating and enabling health promotion in the community and reducing the prevalence of chosen health issues for the Horizon community.

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GNH Assignment 2
Community Health Assessment Report
Introduction (200 words)
Social determinants of health are important predictors of health and well-being of a
community. There is strong association between socioeconomic and cultural factors of a community
and range of health outcomes. These factors have an impact on burden of disease and disparities in
health and well-being among diverse segments of the population. Hence, inequalities in terms of
social determinants of health can have significant impact on health services and quality of care.
Health inequity has socioeconomic consequences both on individual and a community and
improving healthy equity is important to enhance benefits for all residents living in a particular
community (Adler et al. 2016). With this context, the main purpose and objective of the paper is to
conduct a community assessment of the city of Horizons and identify one potential health related
issue for the Horizon community. By the assessment of demographic and psychosocial profile,
community infrastructure and health services in the community, the aim is to find links between
health issues and social determinants of health. The report also provides an insight into the roles of
the registered nurse in advocating, mediating and enabling health promotion in the community and
reducing the prevalence of chosen health issues for the Horizon community. The process of
community assessment will also be used to suggest recommendations to improve public health
services.
City of Horizon Community Assessment(1200 words)
1. Demographic Profile
The City of Horizon is situated on the south east coast of South Australia and it has a population of at
least 30, 000 residents. The location of the city is similar to that of Mount Gambier which is located
in Limestone coast of South Australia and has population of 727, 012. The land area of the
community is 4, 248 hectares and population density is about 6.86 persons per hectare. Compared
to area, the population density for Mt Gambier is higher than that for City of Horizon (City of Mount
Gambier 2017). The median age of the Horizon community is 52 years which is higher compared to
South Australia and Australia. The median age also suggest that that the community has lower
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proportion of pre-schoolers and higher proportion of people in post-retirement. The proportion of
young workforce is only 6.7% compared to 28% for parents and older workers (City of Horizon 2018).
Hence, ageing population can have an impact on health care demands. It increases the prevalence of
chronic disease condition in a community and this can pose challenge to future health and social
care too (Beard & Bloom 2015).
The ethnicity and cultural profiles of City of Horizon suggest that the city has strong
commitment to multicultural diversity of its population. This can be said because the community has
cultural center, presence of different religious composition across areas and many ethnic groups
living together in the region. The population of the region comprise people from different ancestry
such as Australian, Italian, Dutch, Polish, Greek and many others giving indication of cultural
diversity. In contrast, Mt. Gambier has three large ancestries such as Australian, English and Scottish.
The information related to ancestry gives idea about the total size of cultural groups and cultural
association of the community (City of Mount Gambier 2017). Although Australian born population in
City of Horizon is 85.9%, the population of Aboriginal and Torres Strait Islander population is 2.3%
(City of Horizon 2018). Having a multicultural environment and strong cultural identity is beneficial
to reduce prevalence of mental illness and reduce incidence of discrimination in a community
(Shepherd et al., 2015).
City of Horizons has more number of females (51.7%) compared to males (48.3%) in 2016.
The household size of families increases based on the stage of relationship formation. Household
size has overall remained stable in the period between 2011 and 2016. The family composition
consist of four types such as lone person, couples without children, one parent families and couples
with children. Cultural and ethnic factors might be the reason for increase in household size. As it is
located in between two major cities of Adelaide and Melbourne, it is a popular tourist destination
(City of Horizon 2018). The family size and location of the community gives idea regarding economic
prosperity and number of earning members in the family.
2. Psychosocial Profile
The percentage of formal qualification as well as population with formal qualification
is higher in the city of horizon compared to that of the Regional SA. While the percentage of
population with formal education in the mentioned city is 36.2 percent, the percentage of
formal education in Regional SA is 34.2 percent (City of Horizon 2018). Besides that, a good
number of individual in the city has vocational qualification. Societies with high percentage
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of educated individuals show lower superstitious activity (Vyse 2013.). In Horizons, 4.5
percent of the individuals earn higher income, while 44.9 percent individuals have lower
income. Moreover the household income level of the mentioned city shows a higher
proportion of low income household. One of the chief reasons behind low income
household is the increased number of retired population in the mentioned city. Income level
has the ability to directly impact the health of a community. People with low income are
found to be suffering of various kinds of diseases and have lower life expectancy (Askita &
Zimmermann 2015). In Horizons majority of office workers travels by private cars. In
contrast to that, in the City of mount Gambier’s, 81.8 percent of the employees work near
their residence. Hence they do not require any transport medium to reach their workplace.
More than 58 percent of the residents avail in internet connection in the Horizon city. In
contrast to that 71.9 percent of the residents of city of Gambier had internet connection in
the year 2016 (City of Mount Gambier 2017). In Horizons, internet is chiefly used for both
domestic as well as non-domestic business purposes. 31.5 percent of the population of the
city uses either dial up connection or do not have any internet connection (City of Horizon
2018). Considering the fact that a majority of individuals of the city uses internet, it can be
understood that the mentioned community is gradually approaching advancement and city
is in its developing stage. When it comes to employment, 93.3 percent of the labours of the
city are employed (City of Horizon 2018). The employment rate of a city is directly
proportional to its economy. The employment rate of Horizon is lower compared to that of
the Regional SA and this has imposed a negative impact on the economy of the mentioned
city.
3. Community Infrastructure, Goods and
Presence of adequate community infrastructures also determines the resource that is
available for health and well-being of a population. When it comes to the city of Gambier, 24.1
percent of the households are comprised of couples, compared to 22.8 percent in the regional SA.
The City of Horizon has many local attractions such as the Horizon Hotel, the newly expanded
Horizon Mall and the range of local cafes and restaurants for the entertainment of residents. It has
good infrastructure for accommodation and catering to tourist too both within coastal areas and
town centres. Apart from this, the community has variety of opportunities for recreation such
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fishing,, hiking, sailing, trail bike riding and winery tours. Presence of such services indicates that
residents of the community lead a physically active and good quality of life. They have good
opportunities for recreation and physical activity. The presence of tourism services also gives idea
regarding source of economic prosperity for the people. The details regarding recreation
opportunities in the community suggest that it has the right source to promote health and social
well-being of residents. According to Thornley et al. (2015), investment in cultural and community
infrastructure is crucial to promote health and economic prosperity in a population group.
Communities that offer strong social capital and opportunities for human development act as the
driver for growth and economic development.
In terms of business, three most popular industry sector found in the City of Horizons
include the health care sector, retail trade and the agricultural, fishery and fishing center. Health
care sector is the most dominant form of business followed by retail trade and agriculture. Large
number of people employed in health and fishing indicates that health care and tourist demand is
high for the region. This is an indication of source of income and economic development in the
region.
4. Health Services and Resources
Compared to any other industries, more city of Horizon residents work in the healthcare
industry. About 15.5 percent of the total population are found to be working in the
healthcare sector. Thus the overall workforce can be considered to be a major resource of
the healthcare industry of the city. Not only that, the number of employees of the
mentioned sector is increasing (City of Horizon 2018). More than 459 employees have
joined the healthcare industry within the time range of 2011 to 2016. Moreover, the
population of the Horizons is an aging population. As a result of this, the number of
healthcare users in the mentioned city is supposed to be much higher compared to the
cities which are not suffering from aging population. Thus it can be understood that one of
the major reason behind the high amount of recruitment in the healthcare sector is the
higher employment opportunities in the mentioned sector (Laursen et al. 2012). However,
the same rational does not stands for Mt. Gambier as the community has more number of
workers engaged in retail trade compared to health and social care sector. This may be due
to difference in population demographics (City of Mount Gambier 2017). The chief healthcare
facilities provided to the citizens as well as the tourists who come to visit the city of Horizon
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includes Physiotherapy, Podiatry and Pharmacy. Apart from that, some of the other
healthcare services provided by the city of Horizons are Medical science services, Nutrition,
Dietetics as well as GP Plus clinic (City of Horizon 2018). Thus, it can be said that the
mentioned city has the ability to provide a good deal of healthcare facilities to its residents
as well as the tourists (Nakagawa et al. 2012). A high quality healthcare service ensures to
enhance the overall life expectancy of the residents. In spite of the fact that the overall
household income of the city of horizon is lower compared to the Regional SA, due to a well-
structured healthcare industry, the overall life expectancy as well as the number of death
due to heath issues are comparatively lower in the city of horizons.
Potential Health Issue (450 words)
Based on the community assessment of the city of Horizon, it has been found that
the city embraces cultural diversity and it has a strong sense of cultural identity. However,
diversity of ethnic population and cultural groups also indicates differences in health
behaviour of the residents. It can be said from the community assessment profile that
obesity can be one major health issue in the population. This is said by establishing links
between socioeconomic determinants of health. City of Horizon has large number of people
coming from difference ancestry. The presence of different cultural centre in the city is also
an indication of ethnic diversity. Ethnic differences increase the risk factor of obesity
because of strong links with culture and environmental factors. Patterns of eating and level
of physical activity is different for people coming from different race (Taveras et al. 2010).
The style of recreation also changes in different population group. Hence, ethnic difference
at the City of Horizon gives indication about obesity as a potential health issue in the region.
They may not have the environment to prioritize healthy eating and physical activity as one
of the priorities of life.
Another factor that might contribute to risk of obesity and burden of chronic disease
among the community is low level of educational attainment. This is understood from the
fact that only 36.2% of the population aged over 15 had educational qualification and about
54.6% had no qualification. Vocational qualification was high in the city compared to other
form of communication. Hence, low level of communication might also a risk factor for
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unhealthy lifestyle and obesity in people. The circumstances in which people lead their life
have great impact of calorie intakes, diet composition and intensity of physical activity.
Inequalities in terms of education make people vulnerable to obesity. Anyanwu et al. (2010)
proved that rate of obesity and overweight increase across social groups by level of
education, ethnic background and socio-economic differences. There are many studies
which have established causal link between education and obesity. Franck and Burney
(2016) supported that fact large number of communities regarded nutrition education as
important to prevent obesity. Hence, targeting education attainment should be made a
priority to promote health of the people at the City of Horizons.
Although the city has good employment rate, however the number of people in the
retirement group is an indication of chronic health issues in the population. The presence of
chronic disease condition is also understood from the high rate of employment in health
sector. Obesity can be regarded as one major factor that might have increased risk of
chronic disease and demand for health service in the community. Priority obesity prevention
and increasing physical activity should be made a priority at the City of Horizon due to risk of
chronic disease and high health care cost and burden to the health system of the community.
Role of the Registered Nurse in Health Promotion (450 words)
Obesity has been recognized as one potential health for City of Horizon by
establishing links between ethnic difference and poor educational attainment on risk of
overweight or obesity. A registered can play a vital role in health promotion and promoting
behavioural change in the population to improve health and well-being of the population.
The nurse can use elements of the Ottawa Charter to reduce risk of obesity in the Horizon
community. They need to adapt strategies to enable, advocate and mediate and address the
chosen health issues in the community.
According to the Ottawa Charter, to advocate for health promotion means to make
political, social, cultural, environmental and biological factors favourable for optimal health
of a target group (who.int 2017). Hence, a registered nurse can create favourable
environmental for reducing risk of obesity in the Horizon community by interacting with
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residents regarding importance of healthy eating and physical activity for health and well-
being. To provide the right resource for behavioural change in the community, the nurse can
advocate for health by measurement of physical activity, dietary intake and health
behaviour of the group. Based on this assessment, a registered nurse can plan ways to
enable desired behavioural change in people. To advocate for the health issue, monitoring
daily diet intake and food portions consumed and dietary analysis will be necessary as part
of primary health care (Baker et al. 2010). This action will help to prioritize high risk
individuals and address health inequalities (Smolowitz et al. 2015). The NMBA standards for
registered nurse practices also mentions regarding the role of registered nurse on
advocating on behalf of people to engage in therapeutic relationship with patient (NMBA
2017).
To enable health in the Horizon community, it is necessary to focus on achieving
equity in health and providing equal opportunities and resource to people to achieve their
fullest health potential (who.int 2017). After assessment of high risk individuals, a registered
nurse can engage in secondary and preventative health care by providing better support for
health and well-being (Edelman, Mandle & Kudzma 2017). The first step that Registered
Nurses can take to enable health in the community includes providing access to nutrition
education for all. They can prevent obesity by encouraging regular exercise, weight
management and avoid of risky health behaviour such as smoking and drug abuse (Laws et
al. 2015). As all ethnic group might not be aware about health eating and optimal calorie
intake, the nurse can reduce health equity by providing nutrition education to all (Laws et al.,
2014). Although parks and plenty of recreation opportunities are present in Horizon
community, the nurse must also change health belief of people to increase their interest in
physical activity.
Mediating health promotion is dependent on coordinating actions with key
stakeholders like health and socioeconomic sectors, non-government and voluntary
organization and media (who.int 2017). The registered nurse can ensure that resident at the
City of Horizon can engage in physical activity and healthy eating by collaborating with key
stakeholders regarding the need for nutrition education and better health plans for the
community. By communication with government and non-government agencies, funding
arrangements can be done to provide physical activity and nutrition education to the
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community in accessible format. They can also work to fulfil tertiary care requirement by
means of collaboration with health care agencies and prioritizing resource needed to
address special needs of people suffering from obesity related health issues (Blais et al. 2015).
Increasing opportunities for educational attainment will also help to improve health and
well being of the group. Fulfilment of these goals by the registered nurse will also help to
fulfil standard 5 of NMBA standards which related to collaborating constructing nursing
practice plans. Such form of negotiation helps to effectively coordinate recourse and
efficiently implement planned action (NMBA 2017).
Conclusion (200 words)
The report gave detailed discussion regarding the community assessment of the City
of Horizon. The city of Horizon is a community situated in South Coast of Australia and the
report gave detail regarding demographic profile, psychosocial profile, community
infrastructure and health services and resource in the community. The main rational for the
community assessment was to establish link between social determinant of health factors
and potential health risk in the community. Based on the community assessment, obesity
was identified as one of the potential health issue in the community. This was found
because of differences in educational attainment and presence of ethnic diversity in the
community. Both education and ethnic diversity are two factors that determine the risk of
obesity. By giving evidence regarding impact of ethnic diversity and low education on
obesity risk, the report gave idea regarding how socioeconomic and environmental factors
in a community can play a role in health and well-being. Registered nurses are central to
promoting health and well-being of a population. The therapeutic role of registered nurse in
promoting health of the community was discussed by using the Ottawa charter of health
promotion principles.
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HLTH 1036 Global and National Health
Weighting: 45% of Final Grade Assignment Feedback Form: Report
Students name:
Student ID:
Criteria HD
85% or above
Distinction
75 – 84%
Credit
65 – 74%
Pass 1
55 – 64%
Pass 2
50 – 54%
Fail 1
40 – 49%
Fail 2
39% or below
Introduction
(10 Marks)
As for Distinction plus –
innovative
justification/analysis of
essay purpose and
intention.
As for Credit plus –
Components well
developed –
comprehensive and
concise with reference to
literature.
As for P1 plus – all
components included.
Adequate explanation of
the context of the report
includes
 Purpose and
objectives
 Outline of the
structure of report
 Scope and
limitations
Limited introduction to
the context of the report
One relevant component
omitted or 1-2
components not clearly
written.
Inadequate/vague
explanation of the
context of the report
Introduction is missing or
is unclear/confused.
Criteria HD
85% or above
Distinction
75 – 84%
Credit
65 – 74%
Pass 1
55 – 64%
Pass 2
50 – 54%
Fail 1
40 – 49%
Fail 2
39% or below
Part A: Community
Assessment
(20 marks)
As for Distinction with
comprehensiveassessmen
t of Horizon community.
Reference to City of
Horizon, course resources
and a wide range of
academic literature is
used to inform analysis
Detailed assessment of
Horizon community.
Reference to City of
Horizon, course resources
and a range of academic
literature is used to
inform analysis
Soundassessment of
Horizon community.
Reference to City of
Horizon,course resources
and academicliterature is
used to inform analysis
Adequate assessment of
Horizon community.
Reference to City of
Horizon, course resources
and some academic
literature is used to
inform analysis
Limited assessment of
Horizon community.
Minimal reference to City
of Horizon and course
resources or academic
literature is used to
inform analysis
Inadequate/vague
assessment of Horizon
community.
No reference to City of
Horizon and course
resources or academic
literature evident
Assessment of Horizon
community is missing or is
unclear/confused.
No reference to City of
Horizon, course materials
or academic literature
evident.
Criteria HD
85% or above
Distinction
75 – 84%
Credit
65 – 74%
Pass 1
55 – 64%
Pass 2
50 – 54%
Fail 1
40 – 49%
Fail 2
39% or below
Part B:
Identification
ofpotential health
care issue
(20 marks)
As for Distinction with
comprehensive
identification and
discussion of health care
issuefor the community.
Reference to
academicliterature and
core readings evident and
beyond minimum
expectations stated in
course outline evident
Detailed identification
and discussion of health
care issuefor the
community.
Reference to
academicliterature and
core readings evident and
beyond minimum
expectations stated in
course outline evident
Sound identification and
discussion of health care
issuefor the community.
Reference to
academicliterature and
core readings evident and
beyond minimum
expectations stated in
course outline evident
Adequate identification
and discussion of health
care issue for the
community
Reference to
academicliterature and
core readings evidentand
beyond minimum
expectations stated in
course outline evident
Limited identification or
discussion of health care
issue for the community
Minimum reference to
academicliterature and
core readings.
Inadequate identification
or discussion of health
care issue for the
community.
No reference to
academicliterature or
core readings evident
Identification of health
care issue for the
community is missing or is
unclear/confused.
No reference to
academicliterature or
core readings evident.

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Criteria HD
85% or above
Distinction
75 – 84%
Credit
65 – 74%
Pass 1
55 – 64%
Pass 2
50 – 54%
Fail 1
40 – 49%
Fail 2
39% or below
Part C: Role of the
Nurse in health
promotion
(20 Marks)
As for Distinction with
comprehensive
consideration of the role
of the nurse in addressing
health care issue for
community
Reference toOttawa
Charter, Registered Nurse
Standards,academicliterat
ure and core readings
evident and beyond
minimum expectations
stated in course outline
evident
Detailed consideration of
the role of the nurse in
addressing health care
issue for community.
Reference toOttawa
Charter,Registered Nurse
Standards,
academicliterature and
core readings evident and
beyond minimum
expectations stated in
course outline evident
Sound consideration of
the role of the nurse in
addressing health care
issue for community
Reference to Ottawa
Charter,Registered Nurse
Standards,academicliterat
ure and core readings
evident and beyond
minimum expectations
stated in course outline
evident
Adequate consideration
ofthe role of the nurse in
addressing health care
issue for community.
Reference to Ottawa
Charter,Registered Nurse
Standards,academicliterat
ure and core readings
evident and beyond
minimum expectations
stated in course outline
evident
Limited consideration of
the role of the nurse in
addressing health care
issue for community.
Minimum reference to
Ottawa
Charter,Registered Nurse
Standards,academicliterat
ure and core readings.
Inadequate consideration
of the role of the nurse in
addressing health care
issue for community.
No reference to Ottawa
Charter,Registered Nurse
Standards,academicliterat
ure or core readings
evident
Consideration of the role
of the nurse in addressing
health care issue for
community is missing or is
unclear/confused.
No reference to Ottawa
Charter, Registered Nurse
Standards,
academicliterature or
core readings evident
Criteria HD
85% or above
Distinction
75 – 84%
Credit
65 – 74%
Pass 1
55 – 64%
Pass 2
50 – 54%
Fail 1
40 – 49%
Fail 2
39% or below
Conclusion
(10 Marks)
As for Distinction, but
exemplary; provides a
comprehensiveconclusion
thatjustifies the
significance of the report
and recommendations.
Provides a detailed
account of learning
achieved
Summarises the main
points from the report
without being repetitive.
Detailed explanation and
justification for
recommendations
Provides a detailed
statement of learning
achieved
Summarises the main
points from the report
Returns reader to report
and provides a sound
explanation of
significance of report and
outlines
recommendations
Provides a sound
statement of learning
achieved
Summarises most main
points in report
Returns reader to report,
indicates significance and
indicates appropriate
recommendations
Provides some indication
of learning achieved
Summarises some of the
main points in report.
Includessignificance and
some recommendations
Minimal indication of
learning reflected
Main points of report not
summarised.
Or
No significance or
recommendations
Or
No indication of learning
Unclear/no conclusion
and recommendations.
Criteria HD
85% or above
Distinction
75 – 84%
Credit
65 – 74%
Pass 1
55 – 64%
Pass 2
50 – 54%
Fail 1
40 – 49%
Fail 2
39% or below
Overall writing and
presentation
(10 marks)
Adheres to all
guidelines.Exemplary:
 sentence &
paragraph structure,
 grammar,
vocabulary, spelling
 punctuation
 use of 3rd person
 use of inclusive
Adheres to all
guidelines.Excellent:
 sentence &
paragraph structure,
 grammar,
vocabulary, spelling
 punctuation
 use of 3rd person
 use of inclusive
Adheres to all guidelines
re:
 sentence &
paragraph structure,
 grammar,
vocabulary, spelling
 punctuation
 use of 3rd person
 use of inclusive
Adheres to most
guidelines re:
 sentence &
paragraph structure,
 grammar,
vocabulary, spelling
 punctuation
 Use of 3rd person
 use of inclusive
Report written at a
limited level. Some
problems with:
 sentence &
paragraph structure,
 grammar,
vocabulary, spelling
 punctuation
 Use of 3rd person
Report poorly written re:
 sentence &
paragraph structure,
 grammar,
vocabulary, spelling
 punctuation
 Use of 3rd person
 Inclusive language
 below or above
Adheres to very few
guidelines. Report written
very poorly re:
 sentence &
paragraph structure,
 grammar,
vocabulary, spelling
 punctuation
 Use of 3rd person
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language
 word limit met
 well sequenced
 logical flow
language
 word limit met
 well sequenced
 logical flow
language
 word limit met
 sequencing of ideas
 logical flow
language
 word limit met
 mostly sequenced.
 mostly logical flow
 inclusive language
 word limit
 sequencing
 logical flow
word limit
 poorly sequenced.
 poor logical flow
 Inclusive language
 well below or well
above word limit
 not sequenced
 no logical flow
Criteria HD
85% or above
Distinction
75 – 84%
Credit
65 – 74%
Pass 1
55 – 64%
Pass 2
50 – 54%
Fail 1
40 – 49%
Fail 2
39% or below
REFERENCING AND
ACADEMIC
INTEGRITY
(10 Marks)
Extensive sources and
Reference List correctly
referenced as per UniSA
(2016) Harvard
Guidelines.
Multiple sourcesand
Reference List correctly
referenced as per UniSA
(2016) Harvard System
Guidelines
All sources and Reference
List correctly referenced
as per UniSA (2016)
Harvard System
Guidelines. In-text
references integrated.
Adheres to UniSA (2016)
Harvard author-date
system for Reference List
and in-text referencing.
No evidence of
plagiarism.
In-text references mostly
use author date.
The reference list is
complete and mostly
correct according to the
UniSA.
Mostly correct use of
UniSA (2016) Harvard
author-date system for
in-text referencing and
Reference List
No evidence of
plagiarism.
The assignment has some
inconsistencies in
formatting and omissions
according to the UniSA
Harvard style guide
In-text referencing is
incorrect or incomplete
Reference list is incorrect
or incomplete.
Some evidence of
plagiarism.
Possible referral to AIO
No references in text. No
reference list.
Extensive plagiarism
Refer to AIO
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Summary Comments and Grade:
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