TLC 501 Project 1 Rubric and Feedback (20%)

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TLC 501 Project 1 Rubric and Feedback
(20%)
The project will be marked according to the following criteria
N
Below 10/20
 P
10-11.5
 C
12-13.5
 D/HD
14-15.5/16-20
 Links to
support
ANNOTATED BIBLIOGRAPHY
Referencing
of sources
(in-text, end-
text)
Not enough
information has
been used from
academic sources
and/or information
from sources is not
well paraphrased or
quoted. Sources
have been
insufficiently
acknowledged
through in-text and
end-text references.
ü Sufficient information
from reliable sources
has been presented
but much of it is not
well paraphrased or
quoted. Sources have
been insufficiently
acknowledged
through in-text and
end-text references.
Information from
sources is well
paraphrased or quoted
and appropriate in-text
and end-text references
are provided for many
sources.
Information from
sources is very well
paraphrased or
quoted. Appropriate
in-text and end-text
references are
provided for most
sources.
Paraphrasing
Referencing
academic
sources
Critical
evaluation of
sources and
voice
Contains very little
critical discussion
(e.g., analysis,
comparison,
synthesis,
evaluation or
justification), and is
mostly descriptive.
 Contains some critical
discussion (e.g.,
analysis, comparison,
synthesis, evaluation
or justification), but is
largely descriptive.
Contains some critical
discussion (e.g., analysis,
comparison, synthesis,
evaluation or
justification), and
evaluation of different
of perspectives.
Uses critical
questions to discuss
the issue in a range
of ways (e.g.,
analysis,
comparison,
synthesis,
evaluation or
justification),
including evaluation
of different of
perspectives.
Critical
writing
ASPECTS OF
WRITING
Introduction There is no effective
introduction.
The topic is
introduced but does
not follow a general to
specific pattern. There
are a number of
unnecessary specific
points or arguments.
There is not outline
statement or the
overall plan of the
essay is not clearly
stated.
 The introduction follows
a general to specific
pattern setting the
context, purpose and
scope, leading up to the
thesis statement and an
overall plan of the essay.
The introduction
clearly and logically
sets the scene,
states the purpose
and scope, and
leads up to the
thesis statement
with no unnecessary
points or
arguments.
Introduction
Thesis
Statement
There is no
recognisable thesis
statement.
ü There is a recognisable
thesis statement, but
the writer’s argument
is either not clear or
overly simplistic.
The thesis statement
states the writer’s
position and argument
clearly.
The thesis
statement clearly
states the writer’s
position and takes
into account the
complexities of the
issue
Thesis
statements
Topic
sentences
The topic sentences
are not organised in
any logical way,
and/or do not
effectively support
the thesis
statement. Too few
topic sentences
have been written
The topic sentences
could be organised in
a more logical way.
They support the
thesis statement to
some extent.
 The topic sentences are
well organised, clear and
support your thesis
statement using
different perspectives
on the issue.
The topic sentences
are very well
organised, clear,
and strongly
support your thesis
statement with a
wide range of
different
perspectives on the
issue.
Topic
sentences
Body
paragraph
The paragraph lacks
a topic sentence,
the supporting
sentences are not
organised in any
The paragraph has a
topic sentence.
However, it needs to
express the main
point of the paragraph
 The paragraph has a
topic sentence which
supports the thesis
statement and
summarises the main
The paragraph has a
topic sentence
which strongly
supports the thesis
statement and
Topic
sentences
Body
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logical way, and/or
do not relate
directly to the topic
sentence or the
thesis statement.
more clearly, and
support the thesis
statement more
directly. The
supporting sentences
need to be organised
in a more logical way,
and relate more
directly to the topic
sentence.
point of the paragraph.
The supporting
sentences are organised
in a logical way, and
relate directly to the
topic sentence.
clearly summarises
the main point of
the paragraph. The
supporting
sentences flow well,
are organised in a
very logical way,
and give strong
support to the topic
sentence.
paragraphs
Language use
Flow
(coherence,
cohesion)
The texts are
difficult to follow.
Ideas need to be
organised more
clearly and linked
together more with
linking words (e.g.
However, Similarly),
and other cohesive
devices (e.g.
pronouns and
synonyms).
 The texts need to flow
more easily with more
clearly organised
sentences and more
frequent use of linking
words (e.g. However,
Similarly) and other
cohesive devices (e.g.
pronouns and
synonyms).
Ideas are relatively well.
The use of linking words
(e.g. However and
Similarly) and other
cohesive devices (e.g.
pronouns and
synonyms) improves the
flow of the writing.
Ideas are very well
linked to each other
through clear
organisation and
effective use of
linking words (e.g.
However, Similarly)
and other cohesive
devices (e.g.
pronouns and
synonyms).
Flow
Vocabulary Very few academic
and topic specific
terms are used. A
number of words
are used
inappropriately
making the meaning
of phrases difficult
to follow
 Some academic words
and topic specific
terms are used. A
small number of
words are used
inappropriately
making the meaning
of some phrases
difficult to follow at
times.
A range of academic
words and topic specific
terms are used. Words
are mostly used
appropriately making
the meaning of phrases
easy to follow
A wide range of
academic
vocabulary and
topic specific terms
are used.
Vocabulary use is
appropriate and
creative making the
meaning of phrases
very clear and a
pleasure to read.
Academic
vocabulary
Style
Sentence
structure,
grammar and
punctuation
There are major
problems with
sentence structure,
grammar and
punctuation, which
make the meaning
of the writing
difficult to follow.
 There are some
problems with
sentence structure,
grammar and
punctuation, which
may interfere with the
meaning of some
sentences. However,
the meaning of most
sentences is relatively
clear.
The essay is generally
written in well-
structured, well-
punctuated sentences,
and there is some
sentence variety. Minor
grammatical errors in
the project do not
interfere with the
meaning of the writing.
The essay is written
in well-structured,
well-punctuated
sentences. There
are very few
grammatical errors
in the project. The
variety of grammar
and sentence types
used leads to very
effective
communication.
Sentence
structure
Clauses
Punctuation
and Meaning
Grade 9/20
Comments
Rajni, you have not completed three annotated bibliographies, and have left out the reflection
and evaluation. The introduction attempts to follow a general to specific pattern, but the thesis
statement is inadequately written. The topic sentences need to be one sentence, at the
beginning of each paragraph, that sum up the main idea of the paragraph. The body paragraph
you have included contains too much information for the topic sentence. You need to rigorously
check your grammar and sentence structure. It is difficult to follow your argument at times. You
have made a number of scientific claims about climate change (many appear wrong to my
understanding of the process) but have not included any in-text references. This is an academic
essay and you need to reference your sources.
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Project 1 Template
Name: Student Number:
Use the template below to enter your reference, annotations, introduction, thesis statement,
topic sentences, and body paragraph.
Topic: Develop and present an argument about a global issue or challenge that is
impacting on development in your country.
Annotated Bibliography
Bibliographic details of source 1 (global perspective)
Gurjar, B. R., Khaiwal Ravindra, and Ajay Singh Nagpure. "Air pollution trends over Indian
megacities and their local-to-global implications." Atmospheric environment 142 (2016): 475-495.
Annotation - summarise, evaluate and reflect (150 words)
The article given by Gurjar states that, Now a days, most of the population in world is living in
urban areas. Along with this, it is analysed by them that till 2030, there will be 41 megacities in
India like Delhi, Mumbai, Kolkata, and Chennai. In addition, it has been analysed that population
in these cities will become more then 46 millions. Along with this, they use to say that rapid
increase in population and demands of them lead to increase in pollution at very fast rate. This is
because, the use of energy will get increased and this results in splitting of CO2, NO x, green house
gases, and aerosols in environment. I have analyzed that, there are sample number of steps for
solving these issues which has been taken by government of nation like, change in policies related
to pollution creating by vehicle, use to fuels which are less pollutants. It has been evaluated that
government use to take action and make policies for life of a vehicle and about the engine
technique used by people. I believe that every single citizens should focus on this global issue of
pollution and make changes in our habits to sort out the same.
Bibliographic details of source 2 (global perspective)
Sharma, Brij Mohan, Girija K. Bharat, Shresth Tayal, Luca Nizzetto, and Thorjørn Larssen. "The
legal framework to manage chemical pollution in India and the lesson from the Persistent Organic
Pollutants (POPs)." Science of The Total Environment 490 (2014): 733-747.
Annotation - summarise, evaluate and reflect (150 words)
In this article, Brij Mohan use to say that, India is rapidly growing nation, which results in cause to
several environmental issues for them related to chemical pollution. For this, government of nation
has designed special benches, which will make strategies and plans, so that they can control the
level of toxic and chemical in environment. Along with this, article explains and review the
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policies, legal and non regulatory bodies, which is designed by government for controlling the
pollution level and toxins in environment. Also, there are several bodies in India which work
together to make policies so that they can purify environment and provide clean air and water to
their public. It has been recommended that people should use legal policies to follow them
regarding use of vehicles and proper servicing or them. It also consist the role of companies to do
not release toxic chemicals to the atmosphere as they are harmful for other living beings. However,
deposition of these toxic chemicals is responsible for death of several aquatic animals which
should be prevented by conducting proper disposal of these substances by primary and secondary
treatment.
Bibliographic details of source 1 (global perspective)
Skinner B. F., 2019. What is Environmental Pollution: Causes & effects. [Online]. Available
through:<https://www.eartheclipse.com/environment/causes-effects-solutions-to-environmental-
pollution.html>
Annotation - summarise, evaluate and reflect (150 words)
According to view given by B. F. Skinner, the pollution can be known as contamination of
atmosphere by releasing poisonous substances which are responsible for damaging to
environment and harm living beings of Earth. However, the environmental pollution can be
considered as one of the greatest challenge that the world is facing in present time. In addition to
this, it has been analyzed that cause of pollution consist pollution from vehicles, fossil fuel
emission from power plants, clear cutting of forests and use of toxic chemicals in industries.
Moreover, water pollution is also a major issue because industrial chemical and toxic waste has
been released in rivers, lakes, ponds and stream which are harmful for aquatic animal and plants.
Furthermore, access use of air conditioners & refrigerators are responsible for increasing pollution
which is harmful for overall atmosphere. Additionally, the negative impact of pollution result into
climatic changes and global temperature has risen which is not favorable for life on Earth.
Working towards a research essay: key elements of writing
Introduction
150-200 words
(without the thesis
statement)
Pollution problem in the world, as due to increase level of Carbon
Dioxide and other toxic gases in the environment which can be solved by
making few related changes. This all result in loss to Ozone layer which is
build up of O3, and also cause to increase in temperature of earth. This all
lead the earth to face issue of melting Glaciers and also decrease in level of
useable water. India is one of the biggest power in world, and also one of
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the fastest developing country in the world. There are ample number of
factories performing their operations in Indian, and along with this, the
number of vehicles running in India is also very huge. The another reason
behind increasing in level of pollution is decrease in number of trees and
forest. As population is increasing and they need space to live, therefore
for fulfilling their daily needs, people use to cut down trees and clear
forests which results in decrease in level of Oxygen in environment. While
it come to most polluted cities in India, Delhi use to top the list since last
few years, and the environment of there is very much harmful for any
people to live their life.
Thesis statement
(25 to 40 words)
“The causes and effects of pollution at global level which impacts in
development in India”
Above mentioned is the thesis statement which focus on pollution
in India and what measures they can take to solve problems of pollution
along with issues faced by people due to pollution.
Topic sentence 1
(25 to 40 words)
The given topic is pollution as global issue because pollution is one of the
biggest problem for Earth which impacts on every country situation on this
planet. It involves the fact that pollution create major problem due to
which government focus on that and they are not able to apply any
developing programs in India. However, increasing population is cause of
this, and also government of nation is finding solutions for this so that they
can provide some pure environment to the peoples of nation.
Topic sentence 2
(25 to 40 words)
Also, people are aware about this, do not use to pollute or miss use the
natural resources willingly. But the main problem with these type of
people are they do not have alternative of these resources.
Topic sentence 3
(25 to 40 words)
Along with this, there are some parts of India, where people is not aware
that they are polluting the nation and environment. And also do not have
information that they are miss using different online resources.
Topic sentence 4
(25 to 40 words)
Along with this, every citizen is required to change their habits and put
efforts on their level to reduce the problem of pollution which facilitate to
solve a major global issue in proper way.
Body paragraph The access pollution is responsible for generating another problem of
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Develop any one of
the above topic
sentences into a
complete
paragraph
(150-250 words)
ozone depletion and global warming which is not favorable for living
beings survive in Earth. As the level of pollution is increasing by very fast
speed and by this, environment is also not suitable for living of people.
Along with this, emission of carbon dioxide in nature has decreased the
level of oxygen in air and release of chlorofluorocarbons from air
conditioners are responsible for ozone depletion. Due to pollution it has
been find that ozone layer is getting damage and development of some
holes are observed in it. From these hole very harmful UV rays come in
environment of earth and cause to several skin diseases to people living on
earth. Along with this, there are several harms of living in polluted
environment for human health, as this can cause to several breathing
problems like, asthma. Also, due to high level of pollution in environment,
it can cause to some by born diseases which cannot get normalised. India
is one of the fastest developing nation in the world, along with this level of
pollution is also increasing there with a good speed. This has become a
huge problem for them to control air and water pollution, so that they can
save ample number of lives which are meeting death due to pollution and
diseases caused by it. When it came to most polluted cities in India, capital
is top in the list which is Gurugram, followed by Ghaziabad, Faridabad,
Bhiwadi and Noida. These areas are the most populated areas of nation
facing pollution as these are biggest industrial areas of nation.
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Proofreading (formatting, referencing) Yes No Comments
Formatting
 Have you used font size 12 and used 1.5 spacing between lines?
 Have you set your margins to ‘normal’ (2.54 cms left and right)?
Referencing information
 Are all facts, figures and ideas gathered from your sources referenced in-text and
end-text (in the list of references)?
 Are all reference details complete (surname and year of publication, etc)?
 Are all references consistently presented in the required style (e.g. APA, Chicago,
etc.)?
himanshu.k
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Proofreading (grammar, spelling) Examples and comments
Subject-verb agreement Yes No
 Do subjects and their verbs agree in number,
particularly when a long or complex subject
precedes the main verb?
Incorrect
 The lecturer, as well as some of the tutors, are
planning a test.
Correct
 The lecturer, as well as some of the tutors, is
planning a test.
Tenses
 Are your verb tenses consistent?
 Is there a logical reason for you to change the
tense?
 The present tense is used for stating main points,
stating a scientific fact, reporting the position of a
writer, and for making your own statements.
 The past tense is used to report or describe the
contents, findings or conclusions of past research or
events. Using past simple would suggest that a
writer’s research is not currently
accepted.himanshu.k
Sentence fragments
 Have you used complete sentences?  Sentence fragments lack a subject, a verb or both. A
dependent clause on its own is also an incomplete
sentence.
Run-on sentences Have you divided sentences into two by using
either a full stop or a semi colon?
Incorrect
 We can see changes but not learning itself, the
concept is theoretical and hence not directly
observable.
Correct
 We can see changes but not learning itself; the
concept is theoretical and hence not directly
observable.
Articles (a/an/the/zero article) himanshu.k
 Is the noun countable or uncountable, specific
or general?
 Does the noun require an article, and if so,
which one?
 Normally, uncountable nouns cannot be pluralised
in English: e.g. information, evidence, advice,
knowledge, public.
 A specific countable noun normally requires ‘the’,
while a non-specific one (one of many, not a
particular one) would take ‘a’.
Correct
 In Australia, a bill can only become a new law if it is
passed by a majority vote in the House of
Representatives and the Senate.
Parallel structures Are components of your sentence
grammatically equal? Are elements of your
sentence, lists for example, made up of the same
kinds of structures?
Incorrect
 The following actions were taken: advertising the
product, improve quality control and bring the retail
price down.
Correct
 The following actions were taken: advertising the
product, improving quality control and bringing the
retail price down.
Logical connectors
 Have you over-used or under-used linking
words?
 Do they provide clear links between sentences
and paragraphs?
 For example, however, although, thus, as a result of,
in comparison are some common linking words.
Pronouns
 Do pronouns refer clearly to an antecedent?  If you leave the book on the table, you can take it after
the class. Does the it refer to the table or the book?
Punctuation
 Have you used apostrophes correctly?  Apostrophes show possession. For example: The
company’s after-tax profit fell in the second quarter
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of 2006.
 Contractions like it’s and won’t are rarely used in
academic writing.
Spelling and capitalisation
 Have you spelt the same word in the same
(correct) way throughout? E.g. targeted,
operationalise, honour.
 Have you used capital letters consistently?
 Use the spellcheck on your computer, but be
warned: it will not find everything, and it will give
you American spelling unless you set it to UK or
Australian spelling.
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