Course Code: Email Etiquette Assignment - Correcting Poor Emails

This assignment focuses on email etiquette and professional communication skills. The student was tasked with correcting five poorly written emails, demonstrating their understanding of appropriate tone, grammar, and formatting in a professional context. The assignment required the use of Microsoft Word's review and markup tools to track changes and provide comments, showcasing the editing process. The emails covered various scenarios, including job applications, forwarding messages, workplace complaints, meeting invitations, and general inquiries. The student's ability to transform casual or inappropriate language into professional correspondence was assessed. The provided solution showcases the corrected versions of the emails, demonstrating adherence to professional standards and highlighting the importance of clear and effective communication in the workplace. The student cited relevant sources to support their understanding of email etiquette.

Running head: EMAIL
Emails
Name of the Student:
Name of the university:
Author note:

Name of the Student: Name of the Assignment: Course Code
1:
To: Bobby Hogue
From: John Moore
Subject: Job?
Hey Bob, We talked a couple weeks back at the chamber of commerce event. (I was the one
looking for a summer internship and had a zit on my lip that could have passed for a cold soar.
Lol. Whew. It was not. You’re probably like, “uh.. What?” Maybe that helps you recall, maybe
not. Not completely important, I suppose.
I’d really like to come work for you
atyour IT business. You seemed like a cool person to work for, I liked ur striped pants. I’m
available to start working on Monday, but I am taking my driver’s test in June and have to study
and go an hour and half away to take it at an easier place cause I’m not a great driver so I’ll
miss a few days. I am also going to the beach with friends for a week in July. Oh, and my
grandmother has bad gas (OMG IT’S TERRIBLE) and sometimes I have to take her to the
doctor.
I’ve attached my resume, it’s the bomb dot com. Let me know if you have a job opening for me. I
can’t wait to play on some computers. If I don’t respond to your email, I’m always on FB,
snapchat or insta!
Peace out, Ginny Moore
Fixed Essay:
To: Bobby Hogue
From: John Moore
Subject: Job Application.
Respected sir,
I, John Moore, is applying for a relevant job post in your esteemed institution. As I have
heard of that there is job opening in your esteemed institution. I have completed my education in

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the technical field and I am seeking for a job in this sector of the business and your company is
offering a good chances for the people like us.
I would also like to tell you that I have achieved a masters in the computer programing
and I am comfortable with all sort of programming languages. I have updated my resume along
with this letter. If there is any additional requirements for the application form kindly inform me
via email of with the help of the contact details provided in the resume.
Thank you for your time and patience. Looking forward towards a reply from you. I will
also like to say that we have already met before in one of the concert events where we have
discussed about some of the important business aspects. I would really like to work in your
esteemed institution.
Thanking you,
Sincerely,
John Moore.

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2:
From: Heather D
CC: Every single human Heather has ever emailed
Subject: Fwd: Fwd: Fwd: Fwd: OMG funny pictures of hilariousness
OMG this is the best email
I’ve seen all day.
Hope you it. -Delight
Fixed Mail
From: Heather D
Cc: [e-mail], [e-mail] ...
Subject: Funny Pictures
Dear colleagues,
These are some of the most hilarious images available on the internet. I have received
them from some of my friends which I think a hilarious. They are funny and I am sure that this
may lift your mood up on a gloomy day. Kindly check them out for having some good time in
your busy day.
The attachments are given with the mail. Kindly check them out.
Thank you,
Regards,
Heather D.

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3:
From: Karen Grode
To: Anastasia Simoncini
Subject: ...
Did you see what
Bratney is wearing today? She looks stupid. I mean, that color lipstick? She’s probably trying to
get Bryan’s attention. And did you hear her sucking up to the boss. I can’t stand it. Like, we all
work hard. AM I RIGHT?
From: Karen Grode
To: Anastasia Simoncini
Subject: Unsatisfied and Inappropriate employee behavior
Anastasia,
I am feeling very sorry to tell you that Bratney is behaving very inappropriately in office
environment. She is trying to attract people in a very unlikely manner which is very improper in
the office environment. All of us are working hard enough but she is getting the appraisal by
praising and buttering the head. I am aggrieved by this behavior of her so I wanted to share this
with you as well.
Thank you,
Karen.

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4:
From: Christina Tintle
To: Caroline Sherp
Subject: Today’s Meeting
Hey beautiful!
I am looking forward to seeing you today for our meeting.
I’ve attached the materials needed for our discussion. Let me know if you have any questions.
Regards,
Christina Tintle
Marketer
Extraordinaire
hotpartychick@ Christinasmarketing.com
[phone]
“Be so good they can’t ignore you.” –Steve Martin
Fixed Mail:
From: Christina Tintle
To: Caroline Sherp
Subject: Today’s Meeting
Dear Caroline,
It is to inform you that you are being requested to join today’s meeting that has been scheduled.
The meeting is to be held in the meeting room. As a concern member of you team and you fellow
colleague, I would like you to be at your best. Hope to see you on time.
Thank you,
Regards,
Christina Tintle
Marketer,
[phone]
“Be so good they can’t ignore you.” –Steve Martin

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5:
To: Employer
From: Ty Keister
Subject: I need
jobz
der Employer, I wud like 2 apply 4 da job in customer service. I saw ur job on FB. I got my
resume and added it to da email. I wudappreci8 ur response. -TK
Fixed Mail:
To: Employer
From: Ty Keister
Subject: Application for Job
Respected Sir, Madam,
While I was scrolling through my social media account I came across this advertisement
where you are hiring people for the customer services. I think that my profile suits your job
description. I can convince people well and have capability of selling a product. Hence I am
attacking my resume with this mail. Kindly look into the matter.
Hoping for a response from your end as soon as possible. I would really like to join your
esteem institution as soon as possible.
Thank you,
Regards,
Ty Keister

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To: Jimmy Slocum From: Adam Sandler
Subject: Presentation
Dear Mr. Sandler:
Can you send me the presentation from last week? I really enjoyed it!
Sincerely,
Jimbo
To: Adam Sandler
From: Jimmy Slocum
Subject: Last Week’s Presentation
Dear Mr. Sandler,
This is to tell you that the presentation that has being demonstrated by you was indeed
very cheerful and enjoyable. The content was really worth giving a second look. Thus, I am
requesting you to send me a copy of this presentation such that I can watch it again.
Please look into the matter and send me the presentation as per your convenience.
Thank you,
Jimmy Slocum.

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