MGM 542: Self-Introduction Essay - Argument & Communication

This essay presents a self-introduction focusing on the author's key skills, particularly confidence derived from in-depth knowledge and proactive behavior, as essential for effective teamwork and leadership in a business context. The author provides examples of situations where their confidence and knowledge helped overcome challenges and deliver successful outcomes. The essay references external sources to support the importance of these qualities in achieving organizational goals. The assignment includes instructor feedback focusing on areas for improvement such as concision, English grammar, critical thinking, relevance, sufficiency, and precision. The student was asked to revise the original assignment based on feedback and incorporate researched evidence to support their claims. Desklib offers similar essays and assignments for students.

Running Head: SELF INTRODUCTION 1
Self Introduction
Name
Institution
Author Note
This paper was prepared for course ‘Argument and Communication for International
Business’, taught by Professor, which is due on the 25th of January 2019.

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Self-Introduction
I have sheer confidence as the most important skill, which I will bring to my team. I
am confident because of my quick learning skills. Confidence is required to understand one’s
abilities and strengths to accomplish any given task.
In-depth knowledge has added to my confidence. One should have a deep and a clear
understanding of the root problem in order to tackle any situation wisely. For example, in one
instance, I was supposed to deliver a quick presentation to the clients. The team with me
faltered and stated that it was not prepared and that they were not ready with the presentation,
but being the team leader, my confidence and my in-depth knowledge of the topic helped me
to deliver a good presentation. In the session, I was able to answer all the questions with
utmost sincerity and wisdom. Thus, my manager through email praised me profusely and
appreciated me for my successful work. (S. Dhawan, personal communication, June 12,
2016). I can quote in support of my claim by stating ‘The ideal role of both the leader and
team is to ensure quality, integrity, accountability, fairness and balance to satisfy the
stakeholders.’ (Sohmen, 2013). This indeed can be achieved if I have the confidence in my
team and account on them.
In addition, being proactive adds to my confidence and helps me to achieve my goal.
Once during a failure of project deliverables, our company was at a brink of losing its
credibility as it was considered inefficient, but it was my sheer hard work and my aggressive
proactive approach to the project, which helped in saving it. I was able to figure the
shortcomings of the project, which had earlier been neglected by my team members most
unfortunately and garnered praise from the client.
Therefore, my confidence will uplift and motivate my team members, which will help
us in achieving our desired goals. A confident individual having in–depth knowledge of the
subject and proactive in nature is bound to succeed in life.

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References
Amos, B., & Klimoski, R. J. (2014). Courage: Making teamwork work well. Group &
Organization Management, 39(1), 110-128.
Sohmen, V. S. (2013). Leadership and Teamwork: Two Sides of the Same Coin. Journal of
Information Technology & Economic Development, 4(2).

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MGM 542: Assignment 1: Self-introduction
Value: 5%
Domain 1.1
Communicate
Effectively
Assessment Criteria Points
Organisation
Paragraphs adhere to unified, easily
identified topics, introduced with a topic
sentence.
8/10
Document is logically
organizedfollowing the pyramid principle 8/10
Effective
Communication
Writing is concise without using more
sentences or words than necessary to
communicate an idea
3/5
Writing is clear and avoids
unnecessarily convoluted sentences 3/5
Communication style and tone is
appropriate for the intended audience 4/5
Formatting
Assignment is formatted according to
the School of Business and APA
standards
4/5
Assignment has an APA title page, and a
Reference page if necessary 4/5
Documentation
and Accuracy,
Grammar,
Punctuation,
and Spelling
In-text and reference list sources are
cited appropriately and correctly
according to APA Style.
4/5
Writing is correct without errors in
spelling, punctuation or sentence
construction
7/10
Domain 2.1
Critical
Thinking
Assessment Criteria Points
Making claims,
evidence
Significant, relevant and precise claim(s)
clearly articulated in topic sentences 7/10
Clearly supports claim with
substantiating evidence 6/10
Evidence is appropriate, accurate,
relevant, specific and precise 6/10
Evidence logically supports claims
7/10
Total 71/100
Hi ,
Thank you for your work on this assignment. I enjoyed reading about you and your greatest
skills. It’s also great that you were able to complete it by the deadline and in the correct

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format—thank you for your attention to these details.
Please review my comments throughout the paper, and then have a look at the advice below
to help you build your skills in the areas indicated. Based on your rubric scores for this
assignment, your priority for improvement should be:
COMMUNICATION
CRITICAL THINKING
You may also want to address other areas, as you have the time—doing so will help you
improve overall.Below is specific information that is meant to help your improvement. Please
review and apply to future assignments.
COMMUNICATION
CONCISION
In your academic work, you’ll want to be able to communicate as many good ideas as
possible in the word count you have available. This means that you’ll need to make choices
about each word you include. To do this successfully, you’ll want to avoid over-phrasing,
which uses more words than needed to say something simple (for example, try using a single
word like “if” instead of more words that mean the same thing, like “in the event that”).
By using fewer, more precisely chosen words, you’ll give yourself more room within your
word count to include more good ideas or examples, which can in turn help strengthen your
argument.
Have a look at A Canadian Writer's Reference, Section W2, about wordy sentences.
Please also review the following resources about concision:
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/academic_writing/conciseness/index.html
http://library.royalroads.ca/writing-centre/grammar/concise-writing
http://web.uvic.ca/~gkblank/Wordiness/Kim_Blanks.html
http://www.btb.gc.ca/btb.php?lang=eng&cont=1310
http://www.wwnorton.com/college/english/write/waor/CH17.pdf
ENGLISH GRAMMAR AND SYNTAX
You’re demonstrating your determination to learn here! Tackling a graduate program
conducted in Canadian English means your language skills will certainly be put to the test. To
succeed in the program, and in an English-speaking business context after graduation, you’ll
need to begin now to make a point of reviewing and improving your approach to English
language word usage and syntax. It appears that there are multiple problems throughout with
one or more aspects of your language use, including sentence structure, word choice,
agreement and/or verb tenses.
You can speak with RRU’s Student Services office, as they have resources available to help
you clarify any English language questions you might have. You may also want to review
section M in A Canadian Writer's Reference, which addresses specific habits that
multilingual learners tend to have when they are writing in English, and offers suggestions
and exercises to improve in these areas.

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PUNCTUATION
Details like punctuation errors can be a distraction at best, and can at worst have an impact on
the meaning of your sentences. If you have received feedback about your punctuation in this
paper, you will want to ensure you are accurate in your use of the following:
Commas help clarify the meaning of sentences and separate items in lists. Review rules for
comma use here: http://library.royalroads.ca/writing-centre/writing-tips/back-basics-commas
CRITICAL THINKING
RELEVANCE
You will want to consider ways to make your argument more convincing by providing more
closely related examples and evidence to support the points you’re making. Right now, a
reader may or may not believe you, because they would need more proof, particularly proof
that is closely related to the points you want to make. To improve in this area, you should
include more specific information that you can point to that supports your claims. You should
also consider different perspectives, and address those by pointing out their weaknesses. This
will help you create an argument that is well-reasoned, and as a result, has a greater chance of
being persuasive.
Please review A Canadian Writer's Reference, Section A4.
Please review this resource on Building an Argument:
https://library.royalroads.ca/writing-centre/writing/argumentation/building-argument
Please also review this resource about critical thinking:
http://media.royalroads.ca/media/Library/writingcentre/presentations/AW_cthink/
AW_cthink.html
SUFFICIENCY
In order to persuade your reader, it’s important to have enough information and examples that
they can see that your argument is well-supported. A range of different types of examples is a
particularly strong way to do this—look for a few different pieces of information you can
include to support each point/claim you want to make. A stronger argument will have several
different types of evidence.
Consider that as a general rule, good writing is made up of 20% broad claims and 80%
concrete supporting evidence.
Please review A Canadian Writer's Reference, Section A4.
PRECISION
Remember that your argument needs to be well-supported by choosing the right evidence to
substantiate your claim. Look for a range of evidence in order to select the strongest and most
appropriate.Look also for specific examples to use that will help make your argument more

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precise. Choose concrete, specific wording to describe these examples, to ensure your reader
knows exactly what you mean.
OVERALL
In general, this assignment tells me you’re on the right track. Please pay attention to the areas
that are pointed out above, and review the posted course material and readings to ensure
you’re solid on the concepts we’re working with.
Please remember that this assignment is only worth 5% of your final grade, so you have lots
of potential for improvement. I’ve pointed out some specific things you’ll need to address in
order to build your skills, which will help you succeed both in this class and your program.
However, now is the time to take action, before your program becomes even busier. Making
improvements now will help you face the greater challenges that lie ahead!
I’ll look forward to seeing your skills grow as we move forward.