Southern New Hampshire University: Final Peer Review of Two Essays

This assignment presents a final peer review of two essays, analyzing their strengths and weaknesses. The first essay, by Mellisa (2019), is critiqued for its writing style, organization, and referencing, highlighting issues with the flow of ideas, topical sentences, and adherence to referencing standards. The review suggests improvements in referencing and in-depth literature review. The second essay, by Kelly (2019), is praised for its adherence to essay writing format, grammar, and clear arguments, including a good introduction and conclusion. The review points out the need for more recent references and shorter paragraphs. Both essays are evaluated based on their adherence to essay writing principles, including structure, referencing, and critical analysis. The review provides constructive feedback to improve writing skills and research depth.

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The essay draft by Mellisa (2019) writing style raises key fundamental issues with
regard to the contextual write-up and general rules and guidelines utilized in essay writing.
The task has attempted to cover contemporary issues underlying the issue of drug abuse more
especially heroine abuse which is a positive attribute. The task further has attempted to
answer key issues with regard to the contextual organization of the essay. The
epidemiological organization of the essay does not offer an introductory and insightful entry
into assessing and analyzing the author’s content. A good essay needs a clear focus with each
sentence to have clear topical sentences and develops a coherent flow to its logical
conclusion. The development context of the task does not offer a coherent flow of ideas and
instead, there is a mix up of the general introductory with the key context of the issue being
discussed.
The employed referencing style is poor and there is a need for a lot of effort to be
done on this aspect. The author does not follow any systematic type of referencing often used
in studies, further, the generated reference list illustrating poor writing skills and poor
mastery and knowledge of references style. The task does not offer in-depth critical analysis
by assessing various studies undertaken with regards to enough and in-depth literature
review. The literature cited are few illustrating poor research undertaken on the topic (edcon,
2019). Thus in this view, the author needs to improve on referencing issue and offer more in-
depth reading with regard to the research undertaken.

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The essay write up by Kelly (2019) illustrates effective skills in essay writing. The
author has followed a standard format for essay writing. Further, the essay is free from
grammar and spelling errors while offering strong and central arguments with regards to the
progressive development of the topic. There is a good introduction to the thesis with a
definitive opening paragraph being adequately developed by the author.
The task has an adequate introduction of the general topic and focus of the study
which there is a good thesis statement. The topical sunstones adopted supports the key
contextual issue being addressed by the task. The task has elaborated confidently on the
applicable methods and credibility through relevant cited works indicating good and
appropriate literature search undertaken as elaborated by various study guidelines (Owusu, &
Adade-Yeboah, 2014).
Positive aspects with regards to the essay entail the good and appropriate APA
referencing style has been applied to the task. There is proper development of an appropriate
reference list for the work cited in the body. Further, the essay offers a concrete introduction
and conclusion summarising the discussed concepts.
Despite these key positive outcomes, the author needs to have more recent
references. In one instance an outdated work has been cited in the task, which can be
amended by the author. Further, in one instance, there was a long paragraph documented,
which can be amended, as short and illustrative essay displays good writing skills.
Amendment of these two key items offers.

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References
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https://www.enotes.com/homework-help/what-characteristic-features-good-essay-
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Kelly Wu, (2019). Contemporary Issues Regarding Suboxone and Medication Assisted
Treatment. Accessed on 15/04/2019.
Melissa Peters, (2019). Critical Analysis Draft: Milestone Four. Accessed on 15/04/2019.
Owusu, E., & Adade-Yeboah, A. (2014). Thesis Statement: A Vital Element in Expository
Essays. Journal of Language Teaching & Research, 5(1)