Assignment 3 Peer Review: Cloud Encryption Research for TSHEPG

This document presents a peer review of an assignment focused on the security and encryptability of data protection for The Southern Hemisphere Environmental Protection Group (TSHEPG). The review assesses the report's speed, client connection, thoroughness of analysis, structure, and language. It identifies the client's main problem as determining secure cloud computing platforms for high-security needs and evaluates the primary recommendations for strong data encryption. The reviewer highlights the use of peer-reviewed journals and online databases as sources. The review evaluates the report's strengths, including its focus on cloud system analysis and its weaknesses, such as alignment with topic sentences and grammatical errors, offering suggestions for improvement to ensure clarity, logical flow, and a stronger connection to the client's specific needs. The peer review provides valuable insights into the report's effectiveness in addressing the client's concerns regarding secure cloud computing.

ASSIGNMENT 3 PEER REVIEW (247.177)
Writer’s Name: Reviewer’s Name:
1. Speed Review
a. Quickly flip through this report as if you are an executive who is
short on time.
In 5 minutes, circle/highlight the following items on the draft as
you find them:
i. The client’s main problem/challenge.
ii. The primary recommendations.
iii. The types of sources used.
I. The main problem of the client is to determine if cloud computing
platforms are available to provide extremely secure, encrypted
services for his high security needs.
II. The primary recommendations are intended to assist TSHEPG in
deciding whether to strongly encrypt his data in order to meet the
security needs.
III. The report has used peer reviewed journals and online database.
b. On a scale of 1 (wholly un-persuaded) to 5 (strongly persuaded),
how persuaded are you by the proposed recommendations based on
your brief 5-minute review? Circle one.
1 2 3 4 5
c. Explain why you selected that number (1-5) by describing the
relationship between the problem/challenge, the recommendations,
and the types of sources used.
I have given it a three star because the need for better encryption
systems is high in order to hold volumes of information.
2. Client Connection
a. How well does the body of the report connect each section to the
client’s specific needs?
The topics in the main body are not linking with each other. Such as
areas like Design flaws does not align with the cloud computing system
implementation. (C)

b. Write “C” beside any paragraphs that require a more explicit
client connection.
3. Thorough Analysis
Descriptive reports only summarise a collection of sources and their
findings.
Analytical reports—in addition to summarising their sources—also
evaluate the quality of these sources and the significance of their
findings relative to their client’s specific needs.
a. Mark the paragraphs that provide thoughtful analysis with “A!!”
b. Mark the paragraphs that require more thorough analysis with
“A??”

4. Structure & Language
a. How well does the report create a logical flow of ideas? And how
well connected are the various parts? Do you sense any missing
parts or parts that need rearranging?
The report has explained the topics but still requires clarity in terms of
grammar and logical flow of ideas. (“A??”)
b. How well do the main ideas of each paragraph align with the topic
sentences and with the headings and subheadings? (Hint: They
should all be—more or less—the same!)
The topic and subheadings align with the topic sentence, but more
clarity is required in the content.
c. How appropriate is the writing style for the client? Identify any
parts that are too informal or too jargon filled.
The sentences are incomplete at places and references should have
been provided in some of the paragraphs. (“A!!”)
5. Strengths & Improvements
a. Identify the report’s TWO most important strengths.
The two most important strengths of the report are its topic and
concern for analyzing the need for better cloud systems.
b. Identify its TWO most important opportunities for improvement
(other than grammar).

The two improvements would be alignment with the topic sentence and
reduction in grammatical errors.